Each person sits the same distance from the center as we listen to my little sister’s attempt at hopscotch from earlier that day with as much interest as my Dad’s stories about his patient with Atherosclerosis. Which leads to an important point: Don’t take this as a strict by-the-numbers guide. Heads-up: This is probably the most important part of the essay. Essentially, you’re explaining to someone (a college) with whom you’d like to be in a relationship why your last relationship (with that other college) didn’t work out. What you’re (actually) trying to do here: You’re trying to articulate, with specifics, why you want to leave your current situation. Let the reader know if your expectations were or were not met.
In short, you need to talk crap about your ex but still be really nice about it. Some students want to transfer because they had a plan and it worked out, and some students transfer because they had a plan that did not work out.
The “My expectations were met and the plan worked out!
” Example: I originally chose Pasadena Community College because I wanted to a) stay close to home to take care of my mother, who was recovering from cancer when I graduated high school, b) save money by living at home and completing my general ed requirements for under $50 per credit, and c) help my dad at his TV repair business. Now that my mom is cancer free, I’ve finished my general ed requirements (with straight As!
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My passion for cultural experiences and history continued in high school, and I looked forward to more experiential learning opportunities in college. Example 1: I originally chose Pasadena Community College because I wanted to a) stay close to home to take care of my mom, who was recovering from cancer when I graduated high school, b) save money by living at home and finishing my general ed requirements for under per credit, and c) help my dad at his TV repair business. While most of my friends were thinking about which expensive summer program they’d attend or whether or not they should take the SAT for the sixteenth time, my mind was on how to whip eggs to create the perfect "lift" in a soufflé and developing a long term strategy to create my own food television network.
See how each example immerses us in the author’s world? So much more interesting than if the authors had simply said, for example, “the values that are important to me are connection, intimacy, family, and listening.” Instead, each author shows us. So I originally chose Drake Colonial University for its Culinary Arts program. This part doesn’t have to be flashy, but you could use a couple succinct examples to add a little something (“take the SAT for the sixteenth time” vs.
I did what I planned to do and it’s time to move on.” That’s one way to do it.
Sometimes, however, things don’t work as planned—and, in this next example, it’s no one’s fault: The “My expectations weren’t met (and it’s not the school’s fault)” Example: I originally chose Northwestern State Tech for its renowned global health program and looked forward to studying under Prof Paula Farnham, a titan in the global health world.